KELSEY and DAVID are sitting in the living; there is all matching furniture with huge red curtains on the windows. KELSEY is crying over her boyfriend and DAVID is trying to comfort her. It is late on a Sunday night.
KELSEY
I cant believe this could happen, how couldn't I see it coming?
DAVID
It's not your fault Kels, it's his loss, you're an amazing girl
KELSEY
Well if I'm so amazing why the hell does he leave me for her?
DAVID
He was a loser anyway, you deserve-
KELSEY
Yeah blah blah I deserve better, that's what you all say... But what if there isnt a better Dave?... I love him
DAVID
I know its hard Kels, but your gonna make it through this. You just gotta keep your head-
[DAVID'S phone rings]
[On phone] Hey mom... yeah I know I was... I'll be home soon I promise... now?... but Kelsey is having a hard time, her and -... can't I just-... ugh whatever!
[DAVID hangs up the phone violently]
[Angry] My mom is freaking out
KELSEY
[Grabs a Kleenex and wipes away her tears]
Why what happened?
DAVID
I was supposed to be home 20 minutes ago cuz I have to go in early tomorrow for spanish
KELSEY
[Quietly] Oh, I'm sorry Dave, I'm fine really. You can go.
DAVID
Are you sure?.. I can stay if you-
KELSEY
I'm fine really... I'll see you tomorrow
DAVID
Okay I'll see you later... and Kels... stay stong okay? I'm always gonna be here for you, unlike that loser. Call me later if you need to
[DAVID leaves KELSEY'S and KELSEY walks to her room and grabs her diary; she lies down on her bed and starts to write as a voiceover reads what she is writing.]
VOICEOVER
Dear Diary,
Today was horrible; I can't believe that he could so something like this. I thought everything between me and Kyle was going fine... well kinda. I mean I know we've been fighting over pointless things lately but still it's our 1 year in... well it was supposed to be our 1 year in a week. And I was so excited. That was until tonight... we broke up. He finally came out and told everyone that he has feelings for Kara; Kara my best friend in this world. How could he do that? And the sad thing is he told everyone but me. He lied to me and denied the whole thing every time I questioned him about it...what a scumbag. Kara was the one who told me, told me I needed to know the truth... I think anything would have hurt less though...
When she told me I flipped. I got mad at her and said things I didn't mean. I was talking outta my a**. Now she's mad, I don't really blame her... but this is when I need her the most. What do I do?
[KELSEY slams the book closed and gets into bed. The lights dim as she drifts off into sleep still crying slightly. She wakes up the next morning and checks her messages on her phone.]
MESSAGE MACHINE
You have two new messages. New message February 3, 2008 at 10:47 p.m.
TANNER
Hey Kels it's me Tanner... I heard what happened, your probably sleeping but if your not call me back so I can make sure your okay. Otherwise I'll just see you tomorrow.
MESSAGE MACHINE
New message February 3, 2008 at 11:04 p.m.
JOHN
Hey girl, just seeing how your holdin' up. Maybe we can get together later tomorrow to talk about everything... David told me you were having a tough night. I'll see you tomorrow. Night!
[KELSEY walks into the kitchen where her parents are. Her dad is reading the news paper and drinking coffee as her mom is finishing up making breakfast.]
MOM
Hey honey, how was your night? David was here pretty late...
KELSEY
I don't really wanna talk about it... [log pause] me and Kyle broke up
MOM
Well I'm here to talk if you need to... do you want some breakfast?
KELSEY
No I'm not hungry, thanks though
[KELSEY gets her things together and goes to school. The scene switches to KELSEY'S locker at school where she is greeted by JOHN, TANNER, JAKE, KYLE and KARA. KARA and KYLE are off to the side flirting while KELSEY is in a sad mood putting her books into her locker.]
TANNER
Hey Kels, how are you feeling?
KELSEY
I don't really want to talk about it...
I dont know how I'm going to end it all yet... any suggestions?
1 comment:
First off, it should be longer. I think you know that though. Another, you should use the format given by Mrs. Kronzer.
As for the play itself, the start is interesting enough. There isn't really a plot though. It's basically a two minute clip on Kelsey's break-up.
Add in more with David. Why is he there? Just comforting Kelsey? What is he to her? Why does he have to go to Spanish early?
Overall, I just think it needs to be longer. Otherwise, it's pretty good.
As for the ending, will Kelsey be okay in the end? Will she end up with someone else?
Good luck with completing your play.
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