Mama
Harsh words were spoken that didn't make sense.
that thunderous voice that suffocated my ears still plays in my head
time and time again.
I was like her punching bag,
her words cut me like shattered glass.
she stood there staring silently.
frightening me with those piercing eyes as I watched her morph into that creature of my nightmares.
my insides somersaulted as I felt the mixture of fear and love churn towards the empty pit of my stomach.
I tried to fight the tears,
tried to be strong and hold my ground... but I couldn't.
I was always the one left behind,
caught in the shadows of the perfect daughter.
I couldn't compete anymore.
I was done trying to fight for her love and attention.
but in life things eventually will always work themselves out,
you cannot change what happens in the past,
you can only Change Your Perspective...
Time Always Heals.
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ok Ali.
I was thinking... you're pretty rad.
I would like to say that I know entirely what this was about... but! I don't. Maybe you should get to know that kid in CW better? hahahahahahahahahaha
2 kudos!
Sup homie!
okay, the first thing I noticed was in your first and second line, you added more description to the words that were spoken and the tone of your mom's voice. I could hear they way she was talking to you by adding those words.
The second change I noticed was the line "I tried to fight the tears..." and the line after. You helped the reader get into the story and understand more how you felt. I felt the struggle when you added those lines.
Great job!
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